100 word challenge

Once upon a time. there was a potato chip he loved his job being a potato chip. But one day the potato chip got a new job with a new partner. he has never worked with this person before he looked so weird. Today me the potato chip had to work with the new partner. It was time to mix with him. some people started to poor the vinegar on me it was starting to soak in. Man was the vinegar to sharp it was terrible. But I just had to stick with it. man it it was bad.

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  1. Camille,
    I for one am not a vinegar on chips kind of person, so I can imagine why the characters in your piece would have such a hard time 'mixing'. Great use of personification to make the chip and vinegar seem to be human. When you proofread and edit, ask for help checking the point of view. It got a little confusing when you switched from third to first person.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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